Medical School Personal Statement Examples

Writing a personal statement for medical school is probably one of the most important tasks to complete – aside from passing the entrance exams. Before you write a statement, it is a good idea to read other medical school personal statement examples, this way you can see firsthand what type of information and writing the medical school admissions boards are looking for when writing yours.

Consider the openings of two medical school personal statement examples:

Example Opening One: “Growing up in a war torn country in Africa, experiencing only a life of turmoil and watching most of my family “leave” me right before my eyes, I knew I wanted my life to be different, free from pain, and I knew I wanted to help others instead of hurt them.”
While this is a great opening, a better more descriptive opening might include the statement, “Growing up in the war torn country of Rwanda…” This means the same thing as “growing up in Africa,” but because everyone knows what type of violence goes on in Rwanda, the reader has a better idea about the circumstances that made the writer want to help people instead of hurt them.

Example Opening Two: “At the age of 14, my family and I left South Korea to start a new life, and all because a stranger showed us a bit of compassion for a family in need. That very day, I promised I would continue that legacy of his compassion, and I have kept that promise to this day by helping others in any way I can.”
While it is in fact a great opening, it could be better, without losing the meaning of what the writer wants to convey. For example, instead of writing, “and all because a stranger showed us a bit of compassion for a family in need”; the writer could instead convey instead, “and all because a stranger decided to stop the man from mugging us.” This statement conveys the same message while being more concise without making the reader guess at what the stranger did.

The thing to remember is that while conveying an idea is good, conveying it in such a way in which you present the image to the reader, in this case the admissions board, instead of the reader imaging their own scenario, is better. The reader gets the right message about who you are, and interprets the message of the story correctly, without having to piece it together themselves